This has a really good story line and you've included all of the critera (action match, 180 degree rule and shot reverse shot). The only disadvantage was that it the dialoge wasn't very clear when the cars were going past but that can't really be avoided. Well done:).
I think this is a really good video, which had a really good story too it, and followed the criteria. I just thought that the fading effects used at the end werent really needed, it sort of confused things abit. But overall a really good video :)
Really well edited and put together, love the story line but at times it was a bit confusing, like with the conversation with Hannah and Callum, it was hard to make out what they where saying. You managed to get all the criteria in there and it turned out excellently. :)
I liked the story and the way the beginning was shot; though I thought the editing when Callum was at the door didn't work as well with the fades. Overall I enjoyed it :)
The conversation on the phone could have been a bit clearer as the sctors seemed to talk over each other. Callums acting seemed a bit monotone but the storyline was clear and had a realistic feel about it. You stuck to the breif well and the actions matched up. I wasn't too sure about the fading effect at the end but I liked the shot reverse shot and couldn't find any continuity errors. The dialogue could have been clearer when the cars went past but that wasn't likely to be of any of the producers faults. Well done :)
Good video however when Hannah and Callum were on the phone it could of done with being a bit clearer, this meaning that Callum could of done without talking over the top of Hannah. Otherwise aye, alright:)
The opening shot is very well framed, although I would have like to have seen a little more invention in how this was shot (for example, CU of Hannah's face, or of the phone, perhaps). It lasts for 53 seconds, which is a very long time to hold a single shot. When the phone call was running, you could have shot Cal's side of the conversation and cut between them. Alternatively, you could have treated the audio to make Cal's lines sound like they were being transmitted over the phone. The 180 rule works when you cut to Cal, and again this is well framed. The pan as Cal walks to the door is smooth and this shot works well, although I think you might have spent a little longer in black between this and the previous shot to denote passage of time. The additive dissolve at 1:10 is mis-placed; you should have cut to the reverse MS, since this shot is consecutive to the previous one. Similarly the fade through black with the reverse angle. There was scope here for an action match, when Cal knocked on the door (you could have cut to a CU of his knocking); you might also have cut to a shot of Hannah on the other side of the door. The sound from the traffic drowns out some of the dialogue, and you might want to consider this when shooting future material. In summary, then, continuity elements are generally fine, although you could do with being more inventive in terms of constructing your sequences.
The video didnt really turn out like we had planned it to, we wanted a split screen of me and hannah on our phones in seperate rooms which we had actually filmed but for whatever reason which im unaware of doesnt feature in the video. Also the dialogue isnt supposed to be like that, we shot the dialogue all in one shot with the intention it could be cut and pasted to sound right however nobody did this. Thanks for all the positive feedback.
Callum If i had help then maybe we would of had the split screen probablys not as noone i asked knew how to do it! thanks for all of the feed back guys :)
Lauren, we did offer help and you said we wouldn't be able to as we couldn't work on it at the same time. The fact you did the editing at home and forgot to bring it in so said you'd do it again in school was your choice, we still offered to help us and you said you didn't need it.
Its really good, i like the storyline. It has all of the criteria and you've done them well.
ReplyDeletei liked the storyline you used, and the editing was good to, and you used all the criteria, this is a good video.
ReplyDeleteThis has a really good story line and you've included all of the critera (action match, 180 degree rule and shot reverse shot). The only disadvantage was that it the dialoge wasn't very clear when the cars were going past but that can't really be avoided. Well done:).
ReplyDeleteIts really good, I love your action!!
ReplyDeletebut I think when you on the phone Callum was speake to quick ^^
I think this is a really good video, which had a really good story too it, and followed the criteria. I just thought that the fading effects used at the end werent really needed, it sort of confused things abit. But overall a really good video :)
ReplyDeleteReally clear shots and good panning shots at the beginning. Also the music adds a realistic feel to the video :)
ReplyDeleteI like it, really good storyline and the music makes it look better and more realisitic. It looks very professional and all the criteria fits :-)
ReplyDeleteReally well edited and put together, love the story line but at times it was a bit confusing, like with the conversation with Hannah and Callum, it was hard to make out what they where saying. You managed to get all the criteria in there and it turned out excellently. :)
ReplyDeleteI liked the story and the way the beginning was shot; though I thought the editing when Callum was at the door didn't work as well with the fades. Overall I enjoyed it :)
ReplyDeleteThe conversation on the phone could have been a bit clearer as the sctors seemed to talk over each other. Callums acting seemed a bit monotone but the storyline was clear and had a realistic feel about it. You stuck to the breif well and the actions matched up. I wasn't too sure about the fading effect at the end but I liked the shot reverse shot and couldn't find any continuity errors. The dialogue could have been clearer when the cars went past but that wasn't likely to be of any of the producers faults. Well done :)
ReplyDeleteGood video however when Hannah and Callum were on the phone it could of done with being a bit clearer, this meaning that Callum could of done without talking over the top of Hannah. Otherwise aye, alright:)
ReplyDeleteThe opening shot is very well framed, although I would have like to have seen a little more invention in how this was shot (for example, CU of Hannah's face, or of the phone, perhaps). It lasts for 53 seconds, which is a very long time to hold a single shot. When the phone call was running, you could have shot Cal's side of the conversation and cut between them. Alternatively, you could have treated the audio to make Cal's lines sound like they were being transmitted over the phone. The 180 rule works when you cut to Cal, and again this is well framed. The pan as Cal walks to the door is smooth and this shot works well, although I think you might have spent a little longer in black between this and the previous shot to denote passage of time. The additive dissolve at 1:10 is mis-placed; you should have cut to the reverse MS, since this shot is consecutive to the previous one. Similarly the fade through black with the reverse angle. There was scope here for an action match, when Cal knocked on the door (you could have cut to a CU of his knocking); you might also have cut to a shot of Hannah on the other side of the door. The sound from the traffic drowns out some of the dialogue, and you might want to consider this when shooting future material. In summary, then, continuity elements are generally fine, although you could do with being more inventive in terms of constructing your sequences.
ReplyDeleteThe video didnt really turn out like we had planned it to, we wanted a split screen of me and hannah on our phones in seperate rooms which we had actually filmed but for whatever reason which im unaware of doesnt feature in the video. Also the dialogue isnt supposed to be like that, we shot the dialogue all in one shot with the intention it could be cut and pasted to sound right however nobody did this. Thanks for all the positive feedback.
ReplyDeleteCallum If i had help then maybe we would of had the split screen probablys not as noone i asked knew how to do it! thanks for all of the feed back guys :)
ReplyDeleteIf you have particular effects you want to achieve, ask me - I can show you how to do it fairly easily...!
ReplyDeleteAll you had to do was ask Lauren, you looked quite content doing what you were doing. Its nothing personal...
ReplyDeleteLauren, we did offer help and you said we wouldn't be able to as we couldn't work on it at the same time. The fact you did the editing at home and forgot to bring it in so said you'd do it again in school was your choice, we still offered to help us and you said you didn't need it.
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